Research log 5

I got some comments of my first draft from teachers and classmates. I am going to fix them. I found that it's easy to make my opinion on the disadvantages of video games. I also can talk the consequence of video games in two different sides, personal consequence and social consequence. Besides these, I also need to fix my grammar problems, I went to writing center and they gave me a lot of advice and fix a lot of grammar problems. I think this is a good research paper for video games. It contains a lot of sides of disadvantages of video games and some powerful data and events to support my arguments. It also contain some interesting pictures to attract the reader and make the reading of essay be interesting. These pictures also support my arguments. Finally, I finished my research paper.